Name :hellopanda
Story Title :Thank You Diary? (YAOI)
Fanfic URL :http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/hellopanda/
Reviewer : Zara @ mystery-cious.blogspot.com
Title: 5/5: i think adding a question mark to your title will bring in readers to read your fanfic trying to find our the answer.Good!
Poster/Background: 9/10: i really like the poster of all three of them, like they are having such a blast! the color of the background also brings out the theme and genre of the fic, also hints about the Yaoi. although pure yellow can be a little too bright.
Forewords: 6/10: you summarized what is going to happen well between the characters. noted down the location and the plot. but it just bring the readers to a quick conclusion.
Plot: 9/15: as i’ve said, since it’s Yaoi, the readers will get to a conclusion quickly as it is very predictable, the humor in it though is really important.
Creativity/Originality: 4/10: well, lots of people have been writing loads of Yaoi these days and the readers are only wondering on who’s going to be with who. DBSK is also very popular with Yaoi and there is not much surprise to it all.
Flow: 10/10: the flow is smooth, anyone can realize who is talking to who. you also described them well sayin things like “the cute guy..” and “the gorgeous guy”
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10: as i read through it i didn’t see any spelling mistakes which are always good. the vocabulary also is really easy to understand and not complicated. Good!
Characterization: 10/10: DBSK is very popular among us teens today and they are a very good choice of characters, seeing as they are famous and popular, it will bring out more humour in the fic.
Writing Style: 7/10: i am glad that you didn’t used script style of writing as it can get very confusing, yours is better but the quotes being on the same line can make them muddled.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5: i really saw the sweetness of changmin towards jaejoong! cute!
Bonus: 3/5: for Yaoi’s i really prefer JaeMin that JaeHo, so that was good choice
Total: 67/100
