Name :ilovejapan
Story Title : dbsk in the netherlands
Fanfic URL :http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/ilovejapan/
Reviewer : Sweet_YunJae
Title: 4/5
You should make your title capitalized. And your title doesn’t really attract me.
Poster/Background: 10/10
Your poster and background is fine.
Forewords: 8/10
You summary didn’t really catch my attention and it was kind of confusing.
Plot: 10/15
Your plot is alright though missing something.
Creativity/Originality: 9/10
I got to say, I had never seen a story that had DBSK falling in love with the same girl though it is common with other artists.
Flow: 8/10
You flow is uneven but not that bad.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 5/10
Your spelling really needs some work and you had made a lot of mistakes. I suggest finding a proofreader.
Characterization: 7/10
You barely described the characters though sometimes, the characters would describe each other.
Writing Style: 8/10
You writing style is lacking and I was hoping you could improve.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
Your story had a lot of mistakes and it really made me rethink this request. But once I read it, it was getting more interesting. Please improve your lacking points.
Bonus: 5/5
Other that what you were lacking, you did really well for you first fan fiction. From your story, I was able to determine that English was not your first language. Don’t worry, it wasn’t mines either.
Total: 78/100
