Author: Silly Production
Fanfic URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/asp_01/
Status: Completed
Reviewer: Sweet_YunJae
Title: 5/5
“Selling Cinderella” really caught my attention. I’m sure it attracts readers when they saw it for the first time. Also, it really goes well with your story since it’s like a modern-day Cinderella.
Poster/Background: 10/10
The poster and background really goes well with your story’s purpose. It even have a glass slipper! Also, Wu Chun really looks like a playboy there while Ella looks average and Cinderella-like.
Forewords: 9/10
The forewords was good. It described many characters. But what I don’t like is that it wasn’t organized well and it tells too much about the story. You could of just included the part about Ella’s adopted family and the ball. When you include the part about her real parents, it kind of killed it. I understand you want your readers to feel interested from the beginning but too much will also kills it.
Plot: 15/15
Your plot was very interesting. It include many details, which is good.
Creativity/Originality: 9/10
I got to say, your story is very creative and you included many details. The bad thing is that many story have the Cinderella origin so when I read yours, it wasn’t very creative. But once I read more, I got more and more interested.
Flow: 9/10
Everything was good except for the the beginning. You shouldn’t include how Ella was taken away from her real parents. Maybe you should make her found out about it somehow. So I didn’t really like the beginning.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
I’d noticed some mistakes. Some were spelling and some were grammar. You did used high vocabulary so that was good. Just double check your spelling and grammar next time. But this was your first fanfic so you did really well.
Characterization: 10/10
The characters were described well. Mostly, the main characters, Ella and Wu Chun.
Writing Style: 9/10
I got to admit, your writing style is very advance. But it doesn’t “suit” me. Some of your writing confused me even though I could understand it.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Yes, your story amazed me. I’m only used to Korean but you got me hooked with Taiwanese. Lmao! Before, I only know Rainie Yang and Mike He and such from Devil Besides You. Thank you, though. I had a great time reading your story. Sorry if I was harsh on the review but overall it was really good. And I mean it. My first story wasn’t even this good. Lol, And at first I didn’t even want to read this but my mind was changed once I saw that title.
Bonus: 5/5
Your wrting is almost perfect. You deserved full points. I really had a great time reading it. You’re really good at writing. Keep it up! Hope to hear from you soon(:
Total: 95/100
