Author: SueWey
Fanfic URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/suewey3
Status: Completed
Reviewer: Sweet_YunJae @ mystery-cious
Title: 4/5
The title looks like it was from Ri In’s perspective but what I don’t get is the word “again”. I thought she was blind when she was born.
Poster/Background: 10/10
The poster and background were prefect. The poster focused on their eye. Though the background was a but plain, it should be. Black is the perfect color since all she saw was darkness.
Forewords: 10/10
Though you kind of switch it around, the forwords still describes plenty. It’s like a short summary that caught my attention.
Plot: 15/15
The plot was very interesting since you included lots of details. A twist in the end earned you full points!
Creativity/Originality: 10/10
Never had I read a story with a twist like this. Though it was a oneshot, I could stop reading it over again. Ihad seen some with the same idea but yours was better. Plus, that one was made into a drama. Lol!
Flow: 9/10
Your flow from the beginning and middle was a little off. I couldn’t picture Junsu and Ri In’s meeting or relationship. But it flows much better towards the ending.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
There weren’t any spelling errors, not that I know of. But there were some grammar. Please reread your update before posting. That would help a lot.
Characterization: 9/10
I can picture Ri In’s character but not so much with Junsu. Try describing him more. Like how was he before he met her.
Writing Style: 10/10
I became familiar with your writing so there’s nothing wrong with it.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Thanks for requesting me.To be honest, this story was better than the other one. A sorrow twist at the end make me wants to kill you, Lol. I did got confused on some parts but I figured it out. This story was beyond creative and it made me cry. I didn’t even want to take points off on anything but I have too. Sorry if my review was harsh but it’s more your own good. Lmao! I have to include that. By the way, you scored really well! Anyways, Thanks again. Hope to hear from you soon.
Bonus: 5/5
Write more oneshots so I can review them(: BUT make sure it’s a happy ending unlike this one or I’ll cry again. And aim a knife at you. Jkayyy(: If I did that then you couldn’t write any more fanfics. Once I read your oneshots, I couldn’t stop. Continue your beautiful work!~
Total: 95/100
