Title: Sad Sonata: Realizing Fantasies
Author: phantom knight
Fan Fiction URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/sad_sonata/
Status: Completed
Reviewer: Khlaren @ Mystery-Cious
Title: 3/5
Sad Sonata: Realizing Fantasies
I love your title. When I received the email about doing this review, I got so excited because I thought your title was really good. However, I didn’t quite get why the word ‘realizing’ was included. Nobody realized anything in the story. Not even Kwon Minyoung, the one who imagined everything.
If you wanted the readers to realize Minyoung’s fantasies, I guess it didn’t work too much. The message wasn’t clear.
Poster/Background: 7/10
I like your poster. It looks sad. And I find the quote (or whatever that was) really appropriate. It’s just that the font color, style, or I don’t know; do not fit the poster’s overall look. Also, the ‘&’ in Lee Donghae & Kwon Miyoung looks a bit off. It didn’t look good.
Forewords: 6/10
It was rather short, I have to say. But I think it’s excusable because it wouldn’t be as good if you say more. I just want more details about Miyoung though.
Plot: 12/15
You don’t have too much in your plot but I think it’s good. Especially two versions of the story—fantasy and reality. I loved how you wrote both accounts. They both matched perfectly.
Creativity/ Originality: 8/10
I think your story is very original and creative at the same time. I love the two versions and I think that’s what made it more original. For you don’t see fangirls still thinking that way when she’s about to die, right? Your creativity showed here really well. Good job!
Flow: 6.5/10
The first chapter was very fast when I first read it. But when I’ve finished reading the second chapter, I realized why it was that fast. However, I think you can still improve the first chapter’s flow maybe by telling more about each scenario.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
I only found a few mistakes in grammar and the spelling was perfect. I didn’t find any mistakes at all. But your vocabulary can be improved.
Characterization: 5/10
Reading the 2 versions, I thought you missed out one emotion, which is guilt. Kwon Miyoung died because of Donghae, right? Her love for him was too impeccable that she dared to run after him just to say how much she loved him. And she was killed because of what she did, because of him, because of her love for him. Lee Donghae should have felt guilty, right? For she caused Miyoung’s death unintentionally. I also think that it was very unlikely for the other SuJu members to cry because they’ve just met Miyoung, and it wasn’t even a proper meeting (I mean no introductions at all). I understand why Donghae cried. But the other members? I think it’s very improbable.
Writing Style: 10/10
This is my first time giving a ten here. Seriously. I love the way you write. And your ideas, I love them. And if I haven’t said it enough, I’m going to say it again. I love the two accounts of the story, really.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I enjoyed the story a lot. I thought some parts were funny too. But I can’t give you a five here because I still had to keep my eyes opened to see mistakes and flaws.
Bonus: 2.5/5
For explaining the meaning of defibrillator. (lol)
Total: 72/100
