Author: Julie
Fan Fiction URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/baAngel2
Status: On going
Reviewer: Candycane @ Mystery-Cious
Title: 4/5
Weird and odd title but it was related to the story. Somehow it suited the story and the title was kinda out of the blue…anyways good job pn picking the title.
Poster/Background: 8/10
I like your poster, the colour suits the mood of your story. Your background is pretty simple which is nice since to complicated ruins the mood sometimes. Nice work on the poster and background.
Forewords: 6 /10
Your forwards only introduced the characters names, nothing about the characters. But the preveiw of chapters was interesting which was good, but readers usually wouldn’t bother reading the previews until you describe more of the characters so that they would have a better understanding of the characters you are describing. Yu should consider thinking more about the characters and how you can describe them better.
Plot : 12 /15
Very original, I never read a story describing the character as a vampire. Great job with the original and unique storyline though it reminds me of Twilight. I think you did a great job with the plot, it was interesting.
Creativity/Originality: 7 /10
It was original, but like I said it reminds me of Twilight somehow, because with the vampire thingy. The plot was original and unique overall maybe you could describe more about the events. It will help the reader to understand better.
Flow: 8/10
I think you did quite a good job although it may be a little unrealistic but all writers have their own imagination. Your writing is very impressive and I must say I’m really glad to review your fanfic. Keep up the good work!!!
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:9/10
You have great grammar skills. There weren’t many mistakes throughout the whole chapters. Congrats on that!!!
Characterisation:6/10
You should describe your characters more clearly. I wasn’t really easy to understand the characters you were trying to describe. Try and improve describing all of your characters.
Writing Style: 8 /10
I like how you write and describe your story. You wrote the story really well!! I hope you will keep up the good job!! Excellent job!!
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I enjoy your fanfic overall. Good job!!! Keep up the excellent work!!
Bonus: 5/5
Excellent work overall, I believe that you could describe your characters more. Just cintinue what you are doing and just try and focus more on your characterisation.
