Name : RyeoNa Park
Email :white_panther196@hotmail.com
Story Title: Last message
Fanfic URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/PRNmessage
Reviewer : candycane @ Mystery-Cious
Title: 4/5
It totally suited your story!!! But maybe you should get a more attention grabbing title…cause the title wasn’t very catchy.
Poster/Background: 9/10
I really like your poster. It brings out the emotion you are expressing through your character. I find your background really sweet and suits the poster really well.
Forewords: 6/10
You should have describe more on your main character and if possible more on the plot, but since its a one- shot I guess its ok. I think the few sentences you wrote was really good and interesting. It made me very excited to read your story. Good Job!!!
Plot: 11/15
It was quite predictable from your title. You had did a great job describing the scences and I think your plot was good. Next time, you should focus more on your characters, because the plot is important for a good story and so are the characters you are trying to describe.
Creativity/Originality: 7/10
I find your story very unique. I have never read a story so touching. I was close to tears reading your fanfic. Great work!!
Flow: 10/10
I’m really impressed with you. Your story really blew me away. It was all connected, excellent!!!
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
Your grammar was great overall. Eventhough there were a few mistakes here and there, but every writer has their mistakes..anyways I’m surprised and impressed!!!
Characterisation: 5/10
You should have describe your characters more. The female lead was ok, but I didn’t quite get the male character you were trying to express. I know you can be better, and I hope you will have some improvement on this section.
Writing Style: 10/10
I really like the way you write and describe your story. The vocabulary was very good and it brings out more of your story. I hope youll continue your great work.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Bonus: 5/5
Total: 81/100
Yay!!! You did a really wonderful job on your story. All you need to focus more on is your characterisation. You should describe your character in more depth and I know you can do it!!!! Good Luck in your future stories!!!
