Name :cutterpillow
Email :nikszx_07@yahoo.com
Story Title :She’s All That
Fanfic URL :http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/SAT/
Status :Completed
Preferred Reviewer :Zara@ Mystery-Cious
Title: 5/5: the name gave me the first impression of a love story between a very popular girl falling for a nerdy boy. but when i read the first chapter, the idea went away, you completely opposed my guess and made me want to read more about it. it shows that the story is not what we guess. Great!
Poster/Background: 10/10: the poster and background is absolutely awesome! the way it is layed out professionally made. the color blended with the main genre of your story and romance is already spurted out. the quote within it is also very alluring. every body likes a little bit of forbidden love here and there. (i know it’s not really forbidden but like… People are keeping them apart!)
Forewords: 10/10: you have layed out the forewords very smoothly and you have also introduced the characters and the plot within it. it is also smart to put the credits in the forewords so that you don’t disturb the flow of the chapters.
Plot: 13/15: the plot is predictable with a little sprinkle of charisma. every one loves these kinds of stories (well I do anyway)…the ones with twists and the obvious love between two opposite characters.
Creativity/Originality: 6/10: these kind of stories i have read about lots of times, only with different names and events. but in the end, you actually know what is going to happen.
Flow: 9/10: the flow is smooth and sweet. but it seems like you are crazy about fall stops. and the description has lots of ‘I’s in it, it could’ve better with more infinitives and connectives. some sentences i also find really hard to understand.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10: the spelling is great without any mistakes but the grammar and the vocabulary needs a little improving, the better way to renovate your writing is to use Microsoft Word, thesaurus or dictionaries.
Characterization: 10/10: i gave you a perfect score as I am in love with Haruma Miura. (ever since i watched Koizora and bloddy monday). the character of Rosa was very realistic as well! the rest of the crew (characters) made the love between them more alive, without all these challeges…their love wouldn’t be obvious.
Writing Style: 10/10: i’m glad that you didn’t use the script writing style, you have used a range of puntuations. sometimes you also include the reader by adding in rhetorical question which engages the readers more.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Bonus: 4/5
Total: 90/100
