Author: Marxiekurr
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/bunny_1018_5
Status: Ongoing
Reviewer: ctanonymous @ Mystery-cious
Title: 5/5
I really like the way your title kind of describes the whole point of the story. I think it matches your story well–it tells about the main question in your fanfic: will their vow last? And nice and romantic-y. (: It certainly suits your story very well. Especially romance stories–you’d have to make a lovey dovey title. xD
Poster/Background: 10/10
I don’t know if I’m weird, but I think your poster is very DEEP! 
Correct me if this sounds dumb, but I think your pictures really reflect your story well. The smiles on their faces can represent their happy times, before the love problems occur…And your poster is very pretty. And your story was not hard to read at all.
Forewords: 9/10
Your forewords are emotional. I like the flashbacks from their childhood, and you add a bit of young romance in it, and that’s good. ;D You don’t really include too much, but you could add more guiding and leading questions…more below the surface questions, you see?
Plot: 13/15
You have an interesting plot–at least to me it is. I like the amount of romance you put in it, making it fitting perfectly in its category…And it’s not completely similar to the ones I’ve read before.
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
I can’t tell you that yours is the most original and creative story ever. Since Winglin has NUMEROUS and a LOT of stories like this, it’s not easy to create your own that’s different from the rest of them. But you add your own components into your fanfic, which slightly makes it different. ;D
Flow: 8/10
You kept a pretty consistent and solid speed throughtout the fanfic, but in some parts, you move too fast, rushing ahead. Like, when Aaron falls in love with GuiGui, when does that exactly happen? You should slow down and talk thoroughly about important points in the story.
Spelling/Vocabulary/Grammar: 8/10
You have a few speling mistakes throughout the story, but a bit of reading over and editing should fix them. And you have a lot of grammar errors, but editing should fix them, too. You might also want to replace a few words in your story, since they can be used in bigger vocabulary too…it makes your story more ‘pro.’
Characterization: 9/10
Excellent characterization…I could easily tell what the characters were like in the story throughout your scenes and quotes, and I knew more about them in the story…Good job. Not many know how to portry characters in an indirect way.
Writing Style: 8/10
You should probably work on your writing style a bit…I’m just suggesting. Well, script styles are usually harder to read and understand than regular novel writing. So, in order to not make this confusing, you’d want to write in a smoother style.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I really LOVED your story, haha. Partly because I like romance stories a LOT, and partly because I absolutely LOVE and ADORE Bebu. xD
Bonus: 5/5
There aren’t really many Bebu stories nowadays…): So you’ll get plenty of extra points from me for being the author of one…(: Keep it up!
Total: 88/100
Excellent! Keep writing! I hope you continue the story.
