Author: Kat James
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/ladynblack1shot/
Status: Completed
Reviewer: candycane@mystery-cious
Title: 5/5
It suited your ending. You chose a common title for your story. It suited your story though.
Poster/Background: 6/10
I was not very fond of the poster because I personally think, it did not really outline your character JaeJoong. Your title on your poster was hardly visible too. The background was too simple..you could have gotten quotes or your title writen on your background.
Forewords: 1/10
I don’t think what you wrote was forewords. It hardly explained anything. You should have writen a intro and introduce more of your charater. You should really try improving on this section!!!
Plot: 9/15
Its not really interesting, sorry to say. I didn’t really get your storyline at first. You need to describe the scene in more depth for readers to understand what you want to write.
Creativity/Originality: 6/10
Its quite a common plot actually. Eventhough, its a one- shot, you could’ve made it more interesting!! You need more original ideas and I think your story was too short too!!
Flow: 6/10
It wasn’t well connected. I think your lack of character descriptions really brought you down. You need a better plot to lengthen your story. Besides that, you should use bigger words!!
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
There were a few vocabulary errors eg. He was her knight in shining arm..it should actually be He was her knight and shinny armor!! Otherwise, it was pretty good, not much mistakes!! 
Characterisation: 2/10
The plot was too short for you to describe more of your characters!! You didn’t really describe JaeJoong’s personality!! Same goes for Maggie, who is she?? You really need to improve on these sections!!
Writing Style: 8/10
You manage to write most of the story without much errors. Great Job on that!! And again, think of a better plot, add more of your own ideas in it and describe your characters!!! Bring out their personalities and try to convey the mood you want to your readers!!
Overall Enjoyment: 2/5
Bonus: 5/5
