Author: musicbeat
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/musicbeat
Status: on-going
Reviewer: candycane@mysterycious
Title: 3/5
Woah!! Such a random title!! No offense!! But I really have no idea why you would have chosen the title!! It suited some parts on the story only!!
Poster/Background: 8/10
I love your poster!!! Its so sweet and lovely!! So Kawaii!!! But I’m not too fond of your background though, in my opinion, I think its too simple..
Forewords: 8/10
Your epilogue was really good. It made me want to read more!! Your forewords were interesting!! Great Job!! But maybe you could have explained more of the characters you would wanna use..but it seems quite obvious from your poster.
Plot: 12/15
I like your plot, though its kinda common. Dramas and soap opera’s alwayz have something like that. Anywayz, I think your plot was good overall..it brings out the mood and all!!
Creativity/Originality: 7/10
As I said, it was kinda common. You could try adding more of your own ideas to make your story more interesting!! Try your best thinking more of interesting scenes and all!!
Flow: 8/10
Great!! Your story connected really well the whole way through!! Your vocabulary skill was really good!! You used some really big words which really brings out the story!!
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10
You had a lot of spelling mistakes eg. doctoy Chen was no loger standing (chapter 1) and more. My advise is proof read it before you post it, if you don’t want to do it, get someone to do it for you!! Otherwise great used of wide range of vocabulary!!
Characterisation: 8/10
You really brought out Ella’s character!! I think Aaron’s character was kinda unrealistic in the beginning where he waited for her in the hospital. Maybe that’s why you chose the title. Anywayz try explaning and describing more of the chracters personality. Including other’s point on views might help too. But just a few will do!!
Writing Style: 9/10
I like how you wrote your fanfic. Although its still an on- going fanfic, I can see some improvement coming along in the latest chapters when compared to the first few ones. Try proof reading to avoid grammar errors and everything!! Keep up the Good Work!!
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I love Fahrenheit and S.H.E too!! It was my pleasure reviewing it!!
Bonus: 5/5
Total: 80/100
It was really good overall!! Keep up the work!! And try proof reading!!! YAY!! Good Luck with your upcoming chapters!! Looking forward to them!!
