Author: Naire Perplexity
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/9naire10_4
Status: On-going
Reviewer: Zara @ mysterycious
Title: 5/5: I just adore your title, it is very unique and grasps the readers eyes.
Poster/Background: 10/10: the poster and the background is simple and blends in with the Equilibrium part of the title. It is neat and the pictures of the characters selected are a very good choice.
Forewords: 9/10: you have introduced the characters well along with the plot, you have also pointed out the beginning of their story from both of the characters point of view. There are also questions embedded in the plot line like “what’s this favor?” cliffhangers are the way to go! that way, you will get more reader supporting your work.
Plot: 14/15: as i have mentioned already, there are many questions filling the readers head while they read about the plot in the beginning of the story. you have done the job by answering all those questions slowly throughout the whole story so far along with more questions. the happenings are very
Creativity/Originality: 7/10: i would say this story is a bit clichéd with the others i have read so far. but the idea of a wedding is a bit different, the best friend falling in love something not really new to me.
Flow: 10/10: the flow of your story really captivated me into reading more. there was nothing i was confused about, everything was explained very well.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10: perfect. you have re-read through this and it is very good. except that your tenses needs a little work, sometimes you used past tense when it was supposed to be in the present.
Characterization: 10/10: the characters are very lovable. i am also fan of Cpop! the characters like Danson and Show really made the story more alive and ineresting.
Writing Style: 10/10: you writing style is excellent! paragraphs and senteces are very well organized along with the speech
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Bonus: 5/5: Bonus for the great choice of characters!
Total: 94/100
