Author: sammy_chan
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/070809/
Status: completed
Reviewer: mhiz.SUNSHINE @ mysterycious
Title: 4/5
The title is quite good. I think it catches the readers to read your story.
Poster/Background: 9/10
I really like the poster & background. It’s clean and neat. And the color suits with the story itself and the title. Also, I like how the poster and background matches. (:
Forewords: 8/10
You have good forewords. Short, but quite engaging so that it can appeal to the audience to continue reading It’s good to always have a prologue or a brief explanation on what the story revolves around.
Plot: 11/15
I did find the plot rather unique, therefore I gave you an 11. I found the same plot in one of the past stories I’ve read, but you put your own twists, earning you an 11.
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
Well, I gave you eight marks for this because you have put your efforts in this story. And I haven’t read much with this plot. So, you put in a lot of creativity.
Flow: 9/10
The story is very well plan and the speed is very capable to how the plot works, nice job done there. It flows pretty well, the story keeps moving forward. It wasn’t rushing nor dragging.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 6/10
There are some grammar problems, but I can still pretty much understand it, so I didn’t take off much. Remember to always check over what you’ve typed, just in case.
Characterisation: 7/10
You did not describe much on characterization. Since you wrote this in third person point of view, you could’ve done more work on the characterization and the characters’ inner thoughts.
Writing Style: 7/10
You don’t use a lot of variety of words, which can be tiring for your readers because they might get sick of reading the same thing over and over again.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
The foreword made me expect a bit more than what you have written. But, overall, I enjoyed it very much! (:
Bonus: 3/5
Total: 76/100 Sorry for the late review, by the way. Yeah, school is starting soon and I’m always busy. I hope you enjoyed the review though. (:
