Author: hero18
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/hero18/
Status: ongoing
Reviewer: ctanonymous@mysterycious
Title: 4/5
It’s suitable for the story, but I don’t think it’s the best title there is. Yes, it defines the main problem in your fanfic, but it somehow leaks a bit TOO much info. Maybe you could choose a more sophisticated title. Make it ‘deeper,’ ya know? xD
Poster/Background: 8/10
I liked your poster, it was very pretty. But, I don’t really see the connection between the story and the poster. I only see the hurting and forgiving part. Perhaps you should add more clear pictures to support the theme in your story.
Forewords: 8/10
Your forewords were good, better than most I’ve seen, in fact. It’s not too brief, kinda just right, though it seemed too much like a timeline, just listing events that happened in their lives. And you don’t need to introduce so many characters and tell what they’re going to do in the story. That’s not exactly good. But you should add more leading and guiding questions in it, to ‘introduce’ and capture the attention of readers. Questions can be a good eye-catcher, so it’s good to use them.
Plot: 12/15
Good, your romantic/hurt/comfort plot is a popular one…and most people would be interested in it. It was also pretty good and enjoyable, though not that original.
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
This storyline is a lot like many stories that I’ve seen throughout Winglin. Of course, though, no one’s story can actually be the most original, since there are so many. But you’ll get a few points for some tidbits of your own ideas in your story that I haven’t seen before in other stories, like some events that you added in.
Flow: 8/10
Well, I can’t give you a full score for the flow, since, first of all, your story isn’t completed yet, so I don’t know all of it yet. But your story kept a decent flow. It didn’t move too fast, just right. Good transitions from scene to scene, too.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
I don’t know if it was just me being too much of an airhead, but I didn’t see any mistakes in your story! 
LOL. Yeah, there weren’t any grammar or spelling mistakes, in my point of view, and I thought you had a decent use of good vocabulary. Nice job in this category. It takes a lot of work and time to edit and make sure you didn’t make any mistakes.
Characterization: 9/10
You did pretty well in this story, but somehow, I couldn’t really understand very much about Yoochun…Maybe it’s just me, but I felt that you could elaborate on him more.
Writing Style: 10/10
Good writing style, I have to say. Not many writers have the capability to organize their stories and keep them neat and tidy, lol. But anyway, good job, your writing style made your story really clear and understandable, and I had no problemo with it whatsoever. ;]
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
I like the genre of your story, but I can’t say I loved it.
Bonus: 5/5
Because it was my favorite genre, and you did well, I believe. ^^
Total: 85/100
Sorry that it took so long for me to finish. =/ Computer problems
